WALT: To write a descriptive story
my story : A murder in a building
One day I walked past an old rusty building I went in there a very big sound came from nowhere. The walls where were black and horrible. While i was walking around a paper was under my foot I picked it up and read it, it was about a murder that happened in the building. In 1997 a man called steven got murdered by a drunken man, the drunken man stabbed the knife in steven’s stomach so that’s how he died. I walked and I found the knife that steven has been stabbed with . Another large sound came and new that steven turned into a ghost so that was the sound It was nearly night so I went back home. Once I went home I showed the newspaper to mum and she said how did you find the paper then i told her what happened today.
Self assessment: Thing I have done well : I used describing words
I need to work on: I need to use more punctuation
Peer assessment: I like how you have used descriptive Writing and great language towards your writing.
